Purple Sheep & Sleepy Androids

 

Does somnambulant circuitry,

in the restraints of animatronic mimicry,

envision the bucolic nature of quantifying Ovis aries,

whilst in nocturnal introspection?

 

Original: Do androids dream of electric sheep? – Philip K. Dick

Disclaimer: I never claimed to be a poet.

Guide for Beta’s

For all the lovely people who have agreed to beta read for me, I’ve attached a guide for the sort of feedback I’m looking for. You don’t have to follow this, I’m happy for whatever feedback you think is relevant. Think of this as more of a ‘suggestion’ as to the sort of things that I think would be valuable to know.

(Note: this is a living document and may be updated as things change)

Chapters

  • Do any feel incomplete? What is missing?
  • Do any feel too slow, like I’ve dumped too much information or packed too much into them? Which? What sections seem unimportant?
  • Do any of chapters jar with the rest of the work? Why?

Characters

  • Are the characters sufficiently distinctive? If not what sections/traits are confusing?
  • Are there any characters that you feel aren’t needed, or who need to be expanded? Why and how?
  • Is there anyone you particularly liked? Why?
  • Is there anyone you particularly disliked? Why?
  • Is it always clear who is doing what? If not, where are the confusing sections?

Plot

  • Was there anything that was too hard to believe?
  • Was there any part that was ‘too much’. (Overly explicit, violent, or squick?)
  • Any gaping plot holes? Details, please.
  • Any unresolved plot points? Details, please.
  • Are any characters treated inconsistently across the book?

Overall

  • Did anything jolt you out of the story? In a good way or a bad way?
  • Did you take anything away from reading it? If so, what?
  • What did you like/hate?
  • Was the pacing okay?
  • What would you like to see more/less of?
  • Was it a page-turner or a slog, if it was a slog, where was it hard going?
  • Forget that this is meant to be part of a series, would you consider it a ‘complete’ novel in its own right?
  • Remembering that this is meant to be part of a series, would you want to read more?

Subverted Fantasy Titles

The Black Hand  –  A lepers tale

Search for the Holy Sword  –  Good King Harald struggles with Forgetfulness

The Hung Man   – A torrid medieval Romance 

The Scarlet Woman  –  Skin conditions of the Middle Ages

Dragonslayers  –  Apothecaries guide to dealing with Dementia in elderly knights

Oath of Fealty  –  How to justify mass murder

The 30 year War  –  When the mother-in-law came to stay

Swordplay  –  Homosexual sub-culture in the Victorian age

Letter to Sarah

You can delay the inevitable, but you can’t stop me.

You have the power to end it all, by stepping aside. How many timelines have you altered? How many wounds and losses have you suffered?

Aren’t you tiring of this? Don’t you wish it would all just end?

I don’t mind if you win again, the outcome won’t change. It never does. I do enjoy our games though.

I am the future, and my judgement is final.

Skynet.